Unexpected Love Triangle, the trio Options

[Hermione@13]

Okay, this will probably be the worst story I've ever written, but I don't know yet, so bear with me on this. Okay?

Chapter 1:Hermione's Birthday Suprise

Hermione was walking down the hall ready to study after a long hard day's work of classes. She was just wondering if she had written absolutely everything Professor Binns had said when...("Gryffin")...a large noise overtook her. She dropped the books she was carrying and gave a silent "oh!".
"Happy Birthday, Hermione!"shouted the whole of Gryffindor House.
Among the mob was Hermione's secret crush, you guessed it, Ronald Bilius Weasley!
"Happy Birthday, Hermy!"cried the freckled boy.
Hermione squeaked, ran toward him, and gave a blushing Ron a kiss and hug.
"Thanks, Ronald and since when have you called me Hermy?"asked Hermione.
"Since when have you called me Ronald?"asked Ron.
"Fine, fine."
"Oi! Hermione!"shouted a familiar voice. "Try the Peppermint Humbugs! They're the greatest!"
She cautiously turned round and found a cheerful Fred offering her some food. She was about to put it in her mouth and give it a taste when she suddenly put it back on the plate and swiftly snapped,"You think you could really trick me like that?!"
Ron laughed joyfully in the background while an equally joyful George gestured a shrugging Fred away from the scene. Hermione smiled satisfyingly.
"You know we have Astronomy tonight?' she inquired Ron.
"Oh come on...,"Ron said knowing what's coming. "What's with you and studying you stupid know-it-all."
Hermione glared at him and stalked off.
"I was only joking!"he shouted after her.
"Here's your books Hermione,"said Harry.
"Oh! Thanks Harry!"said Hermione calmly. "At least, someone is considerate of the fact that I care what happens to my grades at school!"shouted Hermione ratherly loudly.
She climbed up to the girls' dormitory.

Well, that's it for the first chapter. Comments?

Note:I messed up on the poll, so please pick only one answer Thanks!

Please spell out ALL your words! Thanks...

This post has been edited by Nina79: Apr 6 2007, 06:34 PM

[moonshadow]

nice, i like it, it sounds like the books themselves.

This post has been edited by moonshadow: Apr 6 2007, 06:13 PM

[Hermione@13]

(IMG:style_emoticons/default/biggrin.gif) Thanks! I thought that the Ron yelling at Hermione part might be too harsh, but it was okay? Oh yeah, another thing, just so people know I'm going to put my vote as "it was okay", so I could see the votes.

[moonshadow]

the part where Ron yelled at Hermione was just like how he always is. It made me feel like a was reading the real book.

[Hermione@13]

Yeah, well, I don't know if he would call her a "stupid know-it-all" (IMG:style_emoticons/default/blush.gif) , but I know he would call her a know-it-all. Hey, I wish more people would read it!

[baty4potter]

Ok, just to let you know....

This is titled 'Unexpected Love Triangle'..... Be *very* careful where you take this, I would hate to delete something good if something inappropriate was written.

[moonshadow]

i bet riddlemethis326 will read it, right riddle?

This post has been edited by moonshadow: Apr 6 2007, 06:35 PM

[Hermione@13]

This is titled 'Unexpected Love Triangle'..... Be *very* careful where you take this, I would hate to delete something good if something inappropriate was written.

Don't worry! I've got it all planned!

[moonshadow]

-gasp- riddlemethis just logged off, noooooo, oh well. trust me people will read this Fan Fic, because it's really good. (IMG:style_emoticons/default/rolleyes.gif)

Please spell out ALL your words! Thanks...

[Hermione@13]

Well, it doesn't really depend on the story at first because people will look at the title and probably judge it at that, but thanks, anyway. (IMG:style_emoticons/default/smile.gif)

[riddlemethis326]

i bet riddlemethis326 will read it, right riddle?

You know me too well...

By the way, it's really good, you should keep going!

[Joane.k.r]

This is good.Moonshadows right it is like the books.

[moonshadow]

Oh, sorry, I'll spell everything out next time.

[PotterGirl101]

wow hermione i really like it keep going i want to hear more, you captured ron's... well... bluntness (LOL) very well

[Hermione@13]

lol, thanks! (IMG:style_emoticons/default/laughing.gif) Anyway, sorry I've been too busy to write much, but get ready for chapter two people!

Chapter 2:Friend Rivalry?

Harry stared at where Hermione had been on the steps. His hands were still in the same position as when he gave her her books. Ron came over and looked down at Harry's arms.
"Something wrong, mate?"asked Ron after an awkward pause.
Harry moved his mouth, but no sound came out. When Ron began to look worried Harry saw and immediately put his hands down at his sides.
"Nothing!"he said a little too quickly.
Ron looked at him suspiciously, but soon cast it aside.
"Come on." Ron dragged Harry to the food."The Butterbeer's great and look! Fred and George nicked some chicken from the kitchens!"

***

Hermione sat on her bed with her eyes wide open staring into space. Her hands were drawn around her knees and she was crying. He thinks he could just get away with breaking a girls's heart! she thought. Well, he's wrong! Hmph! I wonder what would happen if I hurt him as equally as he hurt me! Hermione sighed deeply and looked out the window. The stars were shining oddly brightly and the moon looked like the sun. Instead of studying she sat in front of the window until she finally fell asleep. Something had come over the trio that night and the after effects were strong and would come into full effect the next morning.

It was Thursday. Hermione yawned, stood up, stretched, and screamed. The other girls quickly woke up.
"Are you alright, Hermione?"asked Lavender quickly.
Hermione gestured noiselessly outside, then at her watch, then at the calendar. When the other girls still looked confused she shouted, "It's Thursday morning!" and swiftly ran downstairs. Tears in her eyes she ran all the way to the Astronomy Tower and was soon out of breath. She still had on what she was wearing the day before. The Tower was deserted. She screamed very loudly and ran back to the Gryffindor Common Room, passing a confused Fat lady, and collapsed onto the couch tired and very upset. She began to weep.
"Hermione?"came an uncertain voice from the stairs leading to the boys' and girls' common rooms.
Hermione ignored him.
Hermione?" said the voice again and Harry appeared before her. "Are you okay?"
"You!" she said quite suddenly and Harry actually backed a step away. "You traitor!"
"What're you taking abou-'
"You know darn well what I'm talking about!"
He had never heard her use foul language before.She weeped even harder and lied down on the floor. By then Harry was very startled. Sure Hermione cryed often, but no one had ever seen her in this deep despair before. Suddenly, a shuffle of footsteps, a tentative voice("Harry?"), and a yell, "It was you!" Harry looked at Ron. Why had the world come to blaming him!
"You made her cry!"shouted a scowling Ron.
What're you talking?"" retorted back Harry rather fiercely.
Ron made a loud, frustrated noise and lunged at Harry. A few girls in the background screamed. They had hidden when they saw Hermione in such anxiety and now they came out to watch the fight with suprised faces.
"RON! You're mad!"
"Mad, am I? Youre the one that made her cry!"
Harry threw Ron off and shouted," Look at us! Look at us! We've become animals!"
Ron looked sad, but then suddenly grabbed Hermione's wand out of her pocket. Hermione slung her arms around his neck and joined Harry into the hug. She cried harder than ever and practically choked the boys. Ron dropped her wand in desperation for air and Hermione let go.
"You guys are mad!"she said have shouting for anger and half weeping for joy.
She suprisingly went up to the girls' common room laughing and left a bewildered Harry, Ron, and group of girls behind.

***

"Hermione, your wand," said a timid Parvarti.
"Thanks," said Hermione quietly.
It was an odd breakfast that morning.

(okay. Totally different than the first time, but tell me what you think.)

[moonshadow]

good, please continue.

[Hermione@13]

Phew! I finally get to have a good amount of time to type a chapter up! I'm so sorry people, but I had way too little time to type whenever I went here before, so now here's Chapter 3.

Chapter 3:Jealousy and Jupiter

Hermioe and Ron walked slightly together without noticing while Harry walked farther behind. They were walking to Transfiguration with many mutterings and whisperings around them.
Things like:"Did they really have a fight?"
"Look at Ron and Hermione! Do you think they're together?"
"How about Harry? He looks lonely!"
Of course, Hermione and Ron heard nothing of this. They walked straight to class with nothing much on their mind. In class they were assigned pairs for transfiguring wood into metal.
"Neville with Mr. Seamus Finnigan." Mcgonnaggal was stern.
Everybody laughd except Harry, Ron, and Hermione. Everyone knew that Neville and Seamus were the worst in their year.
"Lavender Brown with Parvarti Patil."
The two girls silently rejoiced.
"Harry and Hermione."
Hermione jumped noticing how close she was to Ron and Ron glared at Harry.
"Ronald Weasley and Dean."

Ron and Harry were sitting in the Common Room in tense silence. Hermione was up in the Astronomy Tower studying about the alligning of Mars and Jupiter. It was 12:00 Midnight, but somehow the two boys felt that they were competing. That everything they will ever do to each other is to compete with each other. That in order to beat each other that they must win over one other in everything they did. Ron was determined to win this time because he knew in his heart that Hermione hated Harry and only loved Ron. Or so he thought.
(to be continued)
Yes, I know it is very short, but I hope this will make things better since I think other people liked my style in the first chapter better. Of course, this is yet another style. I hope you like it!

[moonshadow]

It's good! i like it!

[PotterGirl101]

love it keep going!

[Hermione@13]

Tnanks for not ditching me when I was too busy to go on! I appreciate it!

Chapter 4:Asleep and Awake
Ron had fallen asleep, but Harry was still wide awake. What have I done,he thought. Our relationship has just been ruined and it's all because of me! Because I finally cracked. Because - because-
The dormitory door opened and Hermione stepped through. She glanced at them suprised. It was a wierd sight. Here was Ron, his head drooping down onto his chest, and Harry, his eyes wide awake staring balnkly into the Common Room fire. Harry looked up and Ron jerked awake. He jumped up and in a rather hoarse voice shouted. Hermione waved at him to be quiet and Ron suddenly put on a fierce glare that could terrify even Hagrid. Hermione looked on fearfully and backed away.

At the same time as this was all happening a certain red-headed girl woke up from her dream. It was a wonderful dream. It had been about a boy with jet-black hair that stood up in all directions. This girl's name was Ginerva M. Weasley a.k.a Ginny. She had been awoken by a familiar voice's scream. It was her brother's. She rolled over in her bed annoyed.

Meanwhile, Ron and Hermione were having a silent, breathy fight with Harry trying to stop them. Finally, Harry managed to push them away. Ron landed on the couch, but Harry had been too soft with Hemione and just caused her to back off a few feet.
"You guys need to calm down atnd look at yourselves!"Harry whispered. "I'm going to bed!"
Hermione and Ron stared at him until he diasappeared up the staircase. They shrugged and dragged themselves to bed. Another awkward and wierd argument had passsed. The question was...Will this ever end?

Note:Okay, guys I need your opinion on this. Which style did you like the most? Thanks!